Trailer is good but here is some notes:
A. It's too long so it must kill you in bandwidth bills. My clients don't want to give most of the scene away, yet give it enough cuts to make people want to join the site.
B. Lay off on the effects. I did this earlier in my career and notice fans do not like this stuff. I would suggest you simplfy it.
C. Start a style that makes it unique, if you notice all of Peter's trailer has the words "Peter Scores" with a "boing" sound after a quick interview. This is subliminal advertisement that washes the brains of the viewer so when they see this over and over they know it's Peter's POV.
Now if you're a hypnotist, you can see in the POV trailer what I am doing that most of the viewers don't see. It may seem like a simple trailer but it has a deep rooted subliminal statement that screams out "JOIN NOW" and it works. Ask Peter how his sign ups are after he hired me. The bottom line is getting more sign ups through any means nessessary , even if it's subliminal hypnotism. People hire me not for a good trailer but for more sign ups, more sign ups equals more money. There is are some excellent books on this subject that big companies uses on their ad campaigns, I do not want to reveal the secrets but I can assure you they work.