Just cuz I am bored. I am going to butcher this tour and point out where it can do better.
From the very top.
Text reads: "My Official Modeling Site" - Fuck that.
Its her Sex Site where she masterbates for her members or somthing.
Maybe try:
I Am A Bad Girl! I Got 100's Of Original Videos From Home That Prove it Inside!
Next. Portion that reads:
"ARE YOU LOOKING FOR A CUTE AMATEUR GIRL WHO HAS HER OWN PERSONAL SITE?"
Fuck that. We know they want an amateur girl by the point they come to this page. Give em what they want.
Maybe Try: My Kink Is Getting Wet And Showing It All Off For My Exclusive Members!
Now the photo block portions... Sigh.
text reading: "Looking for a cute amateur girl that loves to show off her naked body?"
Fuck that you have asked that question 3 times now... Get to business.
The photo blocks goto contain info about the episode of photos the viewer is seeing.
For example.
"These photos of me are in Tahoe on a weekend get away! I booked a little secluded cabin and got video clips of all kinds of things I did! I got to say I was very horny and had quite an episode with my favorite portable Vibrator!"
Proceed with that sorta theme with each photo block of images. Always elude that what the visitor see's is merely a small portion of hundreds of personal sex experiences.
Next.
Very bottom... There ya go asking them the same question again. Bleh... Fucking aim for the close damnit!
TRY:
"Your are just a couple clicks away from all my newest and archived videos and Photos 100% uncensored! Try my Site Tonight!"
LINKS at bottom:
Read "MEMBERS ENTRANCE | GET FULL ACCESS | NEXT PAGE"
Try:
" MEMEBERS CLICK HERE | ACCESS THE VIP SITE NOW! | WANT TO SEE MORE?"
I guess basically it is merely my opinion and I oughtah just keep my mouth shut about what REALLY works versus what hundreds of designers do everyday without a thought of what the efect is for clients.
I can tell Fletch definatly attempted to think through this a little but it still falls short of feeling personnal for the visitor. Try not to make visitors feel like sheep by reading the same things they have already read at over 100,000 other sites in a format that appearant now at prolly over 20,000 other sites on the net.
My phat
Thanks.