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Old 06-11-2014, 03:23 PM  
SilentKnight
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Had a quick look at gfMate.

I realize it's in dev mode still - but one thing I might point out is the text would benefit from a bit of proofing, spell check and phonetic re-working.

i.e. - "Meet everday 18-20 year old girls waiting to meet you."

Typo in everday - should be everyday. And even then - the use of "everyday" sounds somewhat...awkward.

Eliminate one of the "meet" in the sentence. Maybe think of using "hook up with..."

"Hook up with the 18-20 year old girl-next-door waiting to meet you."

That's just one example that caught my eye right away - there are more typos on the mainpage.

Not tryin' to be an ass - just a friendly heads-up.
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