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Old 06-06-2011, 09:52 AM  
ottopottomouse
She is ugly, bad luck.
 
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Originally Posted by MrMaxwell View Post
Well, she keeps telling me, if there's too much text or too much bold, no one will read it... I didn't agree, but she has done a lot of proofreading and is well educated... so I bowed to her

I had more text and more was bolded
It's not about too much bold, it's about you haven't highlighted the whole of what is relevant to the actual subject. Take away the unbolded text and you get

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Your child is 5000 times more likely to go missing
more likely to go missing than what? you are trying to sell the service
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Your child is 5000 times more likely to go missing than a child protected by Child Shield U.S.A.
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