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Gutterboy · 03-31-2003, 02:20 AM

There are 3 elements in a tour: the graphics, the content, and the text.

With that in mind, lets look at: http://vixens-links.com/alyssa/

Graphics. Your color scheme is nausea inducing. The graphics themselves actually aren't that terrible.. you do know how to put them together in Fireworks or whatever you used.. which is a start.

Content. That dye job, 40 year old redhead is just nasty.

Text. Your sales text sucks. It says nothing more than whats on the FNP script. "Sexy redhead siren" might be ok if there was something remotely resembling one on the page. Your title says "Nude teen..." which, considering the content, is almost a sick joke.

So you know how to put graphics together. Now you need to learn to create an attractive color scheme, select decent content, and write accurate, alluring sales copy.

In my opinion the best way to learn to do this is by surfing the tours of better sites. Go to adultchecks Gold list, surf 100 sites there. Go to a big TGP, click on the galleries and look at the tours.,.. see whats working for other people. Don't copy, just observe.

I'm not going to comment on the second one beyond saying that I wasn't kidding when I said I'd bet $1000 on a blank page with the FNP script converting better.

03-31-2003, 02:20 AM
Gutterboy So Fucking Banned Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: Dis Posts: 4,751	There are 3 elements in a tour: the graphics, the content, and the text. With that in mind, lets look at: http://vixens-links.com/alyssa/ Graphics. Your color scheme is nausea inducing. The graphics themselves actually aren't that terrible.. you do know how to put them together in Fireworks or whatever you used.. which is a start. Content. That dye job, 40 year old redhead is just nasty. Text. Your sales text sucks. It says nothing more than whats on the FNP script. "Sexy redhead siren" might be ok if there was something remotely resembling one on the page. Your title says "Nude teen..." which, considering the content, is almost a sick joke. So you know how to put graphics together. Now you need to learn to create an attractive color scheme, select decent content, and write accurate, alluring sales copy. In my opinion the best way to learn to do this is by surfing the tours of better sites. Go to adultchecks Gold list, surf 100 sites there. Go to a big TGP, click on the galleries and look at the tours.,.. see whats working for other people. Don't copy, just observe. I'm not going to comment on the second one beyond saying that I wasn't kidding when I said I'd bet $1000 on a blank page with the FNP script converting better. Last edited by Gutterboy; 03-31-2003 at 02:25 AM..