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Old 03-21-2003, 08:51 PM  
SureFire
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Looks nice!

It needs some proof reading and copy editing...(if guys/girls really read the text).

One example:

"Since 1999, Angels Of Porn have been tracking down the hottest & the dirtiest 18-22 year old sluts, to commit outrageous crimes against nature!"

would read nicer:

Since 1999, Angels Of Porn have been tracking down the hottest & the most sinful 18-22 year old angels to commit outrageous sex acts and ...!

JMO,
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