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Originally Posted by viki
Honestly, that's pretty bad. Sentences are too long, wrong tenses, and it's really hard to follow. Here's my quick re-write of it:
Now this is some wild and nasty debauchery! These three couples didn't know each other before but things sped up quickly. After a few rounds of shots at the club, this young and horny group got intimate.
In the blink of an eye, drinking and dancing turned into a MASSIVE orgy. Cocks got sucked, chicks got rammed, and cum was flying from navel to face.
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Cool, thanks!
It's true that I find it way easier to write the "official" stuff, it's all about the collocations I suppose.
You can always find foreign people, even if they would be gramatically perfect, they don't have sense for the "right" spoken language to use for the exact situation, so in many times it sure sounds ridiculous or gets a bit different between the lines meaning.
It sure takes a lot of time to get that feeling.