Nice work, Kevin.
A few changes I would make:
1.) Start of with "I believe, as do many of my colleagues, that the proposed..." or "Many in the adult industry, myself included, believe that the proposed..."
2.) I would take out the recommendation to Google "child porn" as I just tried and couldn't find anything but news articles about CP busts on the first several pages. If they actually tried and didn't find anything it may discredit your comments.
3.) Change "As a legit producer, I would love to see that occur to the 1000 or so torrent sites that are clearly violating the law day in and day out with illegal and/or stolen content" in the last paragraph to "As a legit producer, I would love to see that occur to the 1,000 or so torrent sites that are clearly violating the law everyday by distributing illegal and/or stolen content and real child pornography."
Without including the subject they are (supposedly) concerned about (CP) in that line, it makes it seem as if you have another agenda with taking down torrent sites.
4.) In the very last sentence change "with the legitimate side of the industry" to "with the legitimate adult industry". The way you have it stated makes it sound as if there is a side of the industry that is anti-CP and one that is pro-CP, when it fact, as you know, there is not.
That's all of got to offer. Hope it helps!