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Old 01-23-2003, 09:08 PM  
fnet
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Quote:
Originally posted by Meloman
It was actually kinda funny till about half way through. Then my brain started to hurt and I scrolled down and realized holy shit i'm only half way through..fuck finishing...and here i am typing this..

Gotta run and take an asprin, lol
I agree. It was comic up through the beginning of el ratone...
but then it got tiresome.

He lost me right here:

"ok i forgot where this was
going, we'll have to get back to it when i remember."

the free associating but getting to the a point idea would be stronger if he kept you going with more rethreading to two themes previous to wherever he is.

it also needs some kind of punchline.
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