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Old 07-25-2007, 01:46 AM  
SleazyDream
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my entry in to the poetry contest.

wrote this when I saw someone who made me stop and change my whole life around - just on the first time I saw them.

let me know what you all think


Once in a life you see someone
Eyes but touch, impression holds
All others are forgot
and you KNOW

it changes you and you feel shallow
your life teaters on a scale
reassured only by a smile
it becomes clear

Others watch they know so much
why are we so blind to them
if we listened to their meadeling thoughts
also we're deaf

Fans and players, night and day
is there really a difference, is morrow made
fans critizise, scrutenise, and sitigitimize
player just play

I ask just this, i humbly pray
accept this quest or question fate
If only I could read your thoughts
be mine today





I've always hated the last verse but havn't been able to come up with anything better as of yet. anyway - what do you think?
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