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Old 12-31-2002, 05:21 PM  
Kimmykim
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One big thing with that much text is you probably want to use BOLD, italics and different colors to make it stand out a bit more.

You'll want to play up her age, size, and the fact that its exclusive to her site a bit more too.

Nothing wrong with the copy, it could be a tad bit more aggressive I think.
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