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Paul Markham · 11-25-2005, 10:38 PM

About to launch our "Win a trip to Prague" competition. Before we do can you check out the page and text and give me your opinions.

http://www.paulmarkham.com/prague/

mikeet · 11-25-2005, 10:44 PM

Seems ok to me, sounds like a good competition.

3M TA3 · 11-25-2005, 10:45 PM

i like it

Spunky · 11-25-2005, 10:49 PM

Looks cool to me..explains it all quickly

Rob · 11-25-2005, 10:51 PM

Here are some of my suggestions:

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We pay for your flight and hotel stay in Prague and Brno. Meet Paul & Eva and the rest of the crew. Watch us shoot, shoot some content yourself or even be in a shoot. Sightsee, party and have a great time. Experience Czech beer, food and the girls. All things are possible for the winners

We will pay for your flight and hotel while you stay in beautiful Prague and Brno where you'll meet Paul, Eva, and the rest of the fabulous crew. Watch as we shoot premium content and you may even be invited to participate in one of our shoots. Sightsee and party as you have a great time experiencing Czech beer, food, and gorgeous women. The possibilities are unlimited and the sky is the only limit for the winners.

Rob · 11-25-2005, 10:51 PM

Let me know if you like that and I'll work on the other text.

I'm charging by the hour, by the way.

Paul Markham · 11-25-2005, 10:57 PM

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Originally Posted by Rob

Here are some of my suggestions:

We will pay for your flight and hotel while you stay in beautiful Prague and Brno where you'll meet Paul, Eva, and the rest of the fabulous crew. Watch as we shoot premium Internet content and you could be invited to participate in our shoots. Sightsee and party as you have a great time experiencing Czech beer, food, and gorgeous women. The possibilities are unlimited and the sky is the only limit for the winners.

Thanks for that.

How much do you charge?

Rob · 11-25-2005, 10:57 PM

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We meet you at the airport and show you the delights of Prague, help us on a casting in Prague, experience Prague night life and sight seeing. Then it's off to Brno for a few days, see the studio and meet the rest of the team. Watch us shoot and see what happens behind the camera.

We will meet you at the airport and wisk you off to see the delights of Prague. You will help us cast glamorous Czech models as you take in the historic and picturesque backdrop of one of Eastern Europe's most beautiful cities. Then we're off to Brno for a few magical days to see the studio and meet with the rest of our team. This is where you see where the magic is made while you watch us shoot and see what goes on behind the camera.

Rob · 11-25-2005, 11:00 PM

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All affiliates of Paul Markham Teens and customers of Paul Markham Content Store are eligible. For every sign up an affiliate sends we give him one raffle ticket. On the content stores, for every $50 spent at one time we give the customer a ticket. Then at the end of March we make a live draw and the two winners win a trip of a lifetime.

That is pretty much ok, not much to add to that. I would just clean up the English a bit (I assume most of your affiliates / customers are English speaking). Some of it is broken.

Rob · 11-25-2005, 11:01 PM

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Originally Posted by Paul Markham

Thanks for that.

How much do you charge?

On the house.

Great contest and good luck to the winner.

Paul Markham · 11-25-2005, 11:56 PM

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Originally Posted by Rob

On the house.

Great contest and good luck to the winner.

Thanks Rob.

Will be launching the competition next week.

Rob · 11-26-2005, 12:00 AM

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Originally Posted by Paul Markham

Thanks Rob.

Will be launching the competition next week.

You're very welcome, Paul.

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11-25-2005, 10:44 PM	#2
mikeet this & that Industry Role: Join Date: May 2005 Location: Beer City Posts: 5,333	Seems ok to me, sounds like a good competition.